Post 9: Individual Script Feedback

With gathered information when we researched into different scripts. The next stage was to produce your own. I found that my first draft was not good enough to submit  at the time, the main reason being because it was due to the fact that I didn’t have a message for it. Other reasons on why it was not good enough was mentioned through feedback that I received from other members in my class, & also from my teacher. Another negative point that I received in the feedback, was that it was far too short to use & I was advised to re-write it and improve my grammar & length of the script.

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Feedback

When I received my feedback, the main problem with my script was that I did not have a message to my story  This was a major problem because every short script must have a message to it. My other problem wsa that I did not give names to three of my characters, I just named them 'Character 1', 'Character 2' & 'Character 3'. This would  no doubt have been confusing for the reader.

The feedback that I had received from Becky Knapp became aware to me that there wasn’t enough of a story to my script also; my script was found to be quite short and straight forward so I decided that I would try to extend it by adding in an extra few scenes.

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